7 September 2008, 4:31 pm
hi, i'm an international student. this is my hw but i'm not sure if it makes sense or is gramaticcally correct. Please let me know any serious mistakes. -------------------------- “Tonight, we’re going to sleep there,” said my father, pointing the big church. My mom, younger brother, and I became dumbfounded at what he pointed. It was Noretre Dame Cathedral. We entered there with astonishment. Compared to its dark outside, the inside was full of splendid stained glass. I unpacked my bundle containing my precious flute. Suddenly the pastor came to me, asking to play a hymn. Of course, I accepted his request. After playing it, I went to sleep. Next day, we left early and wandered. We arrived in Paris by accident. It was really crowded. Among the throng, I found a suspicious man. He was stealing the purse and started to run. So did I. I desperately chased him, although my glasses falling down. Finally I caught the pickpocket; I did upper cut, kicked and punched him. I said to him, “Hey, I’m only a five foot girl, but I have a Taekwondo black belt!” He gave it to the original owner and ran away. I was so elated that I used my martial art skill to help others. We started vagabonding again and got the Mediterranean Sea. As soon I saw the beach, I ran to the water. I not only swam but also washed. It was the first wash since last month. It was tough to live as a pilgrim. Although we didn’t even know where to go or when to settle, I liked my nomadic life. I could meet new people and experience new things. We began to wander without being aware of our final destination. =========== THank you so much!... read more
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